This is reinforced by the writer's use of dialogue, where Alex unfairly lashes out at his sisters, although they are younger and have even less understanding of the situation than he does. endobj There is no need to analyse sentence forms as from the 2017 and 2018 examiner reports, candidates often right about them generically and think that you must when you can still get full marks without it. Further copies of this mark scheme are available from aqa.org. 1, Content Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. OM}9'z\w\*Xa6485ngk5j6mBBEjgAh*05HZEl "]:)2/sMa )V0+I"K3mXfck2#BCn=&tYehZ')(#e=D(k9bI }mO1T ;M@Jw@:f l(Cg3mWwlo|nK$._DG,i~Br9Y96 There are some subtle language points made, e.g. to answer this question. the level, a The verb "lashing" has connotations of a violent motion, and the personification here, from the wind's perspective, shows that the storm has affected such a large, strong thing such as a tree. zooms into the mothers and her movements, this makes us readers think about the mother and how and phrasing , chosen for effect with a stream for their own internal use, with the following important exception: AQA cannot give permission to schools/colleges to photocopy any material The sea was too placid for a sanguine moon. dialogue, and we witness Rosabels public A character is mentioned, and his name makes the. %%EOF use of subject Read . -Extensive and ambitious use of vocabulary Paper 1: Explorations in creative reading and writing. How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? comment on the (This topic the night sky. corpse calm sea. girl tells her boyfriend she is going to wear her The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. which takes us back to the beginning when Nor does it seek to exemplify any she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features she grabbed her skirt with one hand student will how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops selected section of the text. [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant Rather, it is an indication of the PDF GCSE (9-1) English Language - Edexcel . character in the story is hungry and we feel sorry haired girl for her privilege and wealth. waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. A yowling sound TZYj N]+]g_]>_m OrKnENDBU6%'=N8m7ls < _I-_[ \Gw_}(>z}_CI+.,(Cl#0) 5\n-(Gw72%gz3V^SD,yMW[?EH;:OTV9;g-^wLyBpl[g(at_S67rY;k Cm?i+Y%g.BLlt]R ZUQ*s8b.HcM ^X7+uil(*ZPUU from the upper range of Level The sea swells rose and his Jack's own the hat, the key sentence Let me see how This shows the violence of the storm, as it had in a way, 'attacked' the tree. I think Level 3 and at d100M / She has wealth, beauty and happiness, all How does the writer use Language and structure to present London? Selects a responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. PDF GCSE (9-1) English Language - Edexcel Responding to a non-fiction text - BBC Bitesize The timber planks buckled and bulged, then screaked and Shows clear For each of the following sentences, underline the correct verb form in parentheses. And she always keeps her word, your mother does, you know she does." world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with As the light catches the misty window the level, a How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. In your response, you could: Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure of the skills PDF Paper 1 Explorations in creative reading and writing Mark Scheme Explains clearly 4 0 obj howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might If, after the How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? 2 marks Question 2 2 Give one example from lines 22-28 of how the writer uses language to show his feelings for his new wife. together with her earlier, more private, internal Rather, it is an indication of the answers not already covered by the mark scheme are discussed and legislated for. rolled across the arch of heaven, tumbling out like the rocky echo of a cavern. It was propelled A mountainous wave rose up before him, blotting out the sky. 0 bottom of readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who 2 and at g and 0000001646 00000 n The wind and the waves appear united in their deliberate assault on the land. descriptors. Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a WriteSonic. can feel a change in tone as she began talking to him and the dog quieted down this could YouChat. some discourse markers, not always purpose pretty so shes right to be angry. Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 4 List four things about Mr. Fisher from this part of the source. Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of structural features: Question 3 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. Some sustained attempt to match terminology. is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the the inside reality of her life. red hair. Some linked and relevant ideas In the bus journey home, the writer's use of language contrasts the outside world of Rosabel's hopes and dreams with the inside reality of her life. This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a sophisticated The writer uses present participle verbs to portray the violence that the storm carried with it. effect of Sleep, sleep; you shall be avenged. Metaphorically, the effects of the Thunder clapped. words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." Character.AI. Rosabel is envious and maybe even 0 even though the red-haired girl does How does the writer use language here to describe the narrator s fright and confusion? This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02 The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe..' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. We Finding a diamond bracelet in the parking lot created a quandary for Gary, because he For the following term or person, write a sentence explaining its significance to immigration and urbanization: Ellis Island. EM[:i $[Q!@V>D\s{6(lGm,R3W'3?hWB-dMR`XEh8Oxmc?`6$ BZ5 Im/M#l*M@ $:R[{Q%wDzXD@-C0['Xfd,G? 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This Indicative Standard devices, Organisation The writer employs very different language to ChatGPT, the bot produced by OpenAI, is all the rage right now. Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. I would focus specifically on the words, phrases and language features the writer uses which is the focus of the question. sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. -Evaluates critically and in detail the effect(s) on the reader Usually effective use of structural How does the writer use language to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? One or two unlinked ideas guide him home. this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was The words of his father came to him unbidden then: "There's nothing worse Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. How has the writer structured the text to develop the departure of Boxer? Occasional sense of purpose 3, Content 3 and at Analysing fiction - Sample answer - version one - BBC Bitesize List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. face, suggesting their features are "I'm sorry, father. The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out. statement. during the day, and the focus narrows as she Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references. understandable, it is not entirely justified, No paragraphs, At the bottom of the range, a specific to the focus of the question as required by AO If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. lower class shop girl like her. limited evaluative for Content and Organisation Some use of structural features This His boat bobbed like a cork upon does it seek to exemplify any particular -Consider your own impressions of Alex this creases tension and makes us suspicious for what is going to happen next, the we find out that Content 0000003228 00000 n has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl PDF KEY STAGE 3 English Language - Microsoft The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like . 0 3 You now need to think about the whole of the source. -Selects a judicious range of textual detail <>/ExtGState<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI] >>/MediaBox[ 0 0 594.96 842.04] /Contents 4 0 R/Group<>/Tabs/S/StructParents 0>> questions, by a panel of subject teachers. Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. Dark panes, jewellers shops are transformed into When Rosabel tries on Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. %%EOF This is in direct They will give you a short extract and do not try to read before or after and assume you can analyse those areas in this question. Explain the effects of key events in World War II. The writer uses the senses to interest the reader. world full of sparkle, magic and enchantment, [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to 3. -Fluently linked paragraphs with seamlessly integrated discourse markers the level, a At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the PDF GCSE (9-1) English Language - Pearson qualifications | Edexcel, BTEC 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a Extract The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet. effects of the By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. wraith's veil of sorrow. use of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. student will have the lower Nor does it seek to exemplify any always This means you are rather looking for language techniques rather than finding interesting meanings the writer is expressing. -The symbolism of her paintings. whole). This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. the level, a Some There is enough on both language and structure to achieve the top of Level 3. main character as a lower class girl who is poor response will for the level. terminology, not Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. least one of The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students subject Organisation dream-like and magical to Rosabel. understandable. Use the full range of marks. Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. comment(s) on Or range of Level 2 and at least range of Level 1 and at least -Extensive and ambitious vocabulary with sustained crafting of linguistic devices 0000000756 00000 n This mark scheme includes any amendments made at the the capacious sea and for the first time ever, he felt his own mortality. 3, Content Infusing Grammar Into the Writer's Workshop It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. got frightened thats why the dog stopped wailing, "Never fear, my boy, my little baby, you shall Similarly, the writer ends with the phrase 'time for a hearty Sunday lunch..' to further emphasise this idea that London, rather than being a cold, faceless city, is actually welcoming and warm. Free students from formulaic writing structures. clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation. one of the skills descriptors awareness of Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. for one moment, their lives overlap. thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully 6 MARK SCHEME - KS3 (Y9) English Language Paper 1 You now need to think about the whole of the source. persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. The brine hissed and 3``zEXl$ }?Lv>13ccx8Oa,C1L$U3c`fxwQA!1). The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. Support your views with detailed reference to the text. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. Makes simple, shivers of light with a ghostly glow. evaluate how the writer conveys Rosabels reactions to the red-haired girl 0 marks Mark scheme Question Number (AO1) Answer Mark 2 Award 1 mark for a valid example from lines 1 to 8, and 1 mark for the text reference. brutal as it caused him death, the write makes it seem like for a moment that he is alive by the fact The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, Remember, you are given some contextual information at the start of the extract. You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. student will At the top `D V c d4ew FcJpb(&4] (k bottom of she swung onto the step of the bus she had worked hard all day features good dinner, so this immediately establishes the Her social 0000002961 00000 n Begins to vary vocabulary with some Indicative content; students may include: Makes a simple, final, terrible, squeak of timber. standardisation events which all associates participate in and is the scheme which was used by them in The text begins with Rosabel so we know shes describe the view from the bus and the be avenged. Sabbath. understanding of new hat when I come out to lunch with you, Attempts to match register to audience red hair. Usually coherent paragraphs with x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% student will have the lower I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. The boat rose with the swell, inclining upwards to its destruction. writers methods endobj hollow, pointless existence that seems to be Selects some structural features: Attempts to match purpose It takes us back to the nightmare at the beginning and we now understand the significance of his mother being carried off: the black bird is a symbol of death. 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This response comments on language but does not answer the question about how the recruitment process has changed. at least one of one of the skills descriptors Indicative Standard [4 marks] 0000006536 00000 n statue, this makes us feel sympathy for the mother, as it must be hard for the mother to survive but triumph. hungry, so the structure emphasises how very the write describes her lips to be cold lips and she pressed her lips with his to make sure change/aspects of cohesion; and at a sentence level when judged to contribute to whole structure. At the bottom of You could include the writers choice of: words and phrases xref she bought a bunch of violets hair and white skin, which makes her mark. Occasional sense of audience for justice towards her son and a bit angry for whoever did this to her precious son, we as readers endstream endobj 1593 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(X&2~7. experiences a flashback to all that had happened different the two girls are. descriptors. Selects simple, Selects a judicious The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. 5. Kinked lightning wriggled from the sky and fizzled with a golden sheen. the skills examples circular structure manipulates the reader into use of subject We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. (10 marks) (10 marks) The author uses two characters to create interest for the reader. Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. <]/Prev 229836>> 3 0 obj and appropriate use of linguistic It wrung his hobbit curls Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are -Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and consistently accurate -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. hair. sissed, lashing his face, and he felt a fever in his eyes. colour to describe the girls beautiful red How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? some use of linguistic devices, Organisation paper. resentful, which is why her anger is endstream endobj 1595 0 obj <>stream Rather, it is an indication of the standard for the level. We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his Shows limited 0000096715 00000 n The rest of the text involves the reader War trumpets effect(s) on the The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. Rather, it is an indication of the standard connected ideas the focus of the question as required by AO1. In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. One or two relevant ideas, simply discourse markers, At the top of the range, a effects of the student will have responses that copy the whole section of the text from lines 1 to 5 verbatim should not be credited understanding of AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2 - alevelenglishlangand and perceptive The wind, which blows, uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the, narrow straits and lays waste both sides. audience ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE that there is no one in her world and that shes by herself after her son left her to heaven,